The signs.
poem by:
Christopher Russon
Written
on Oct 23, 2017
You danced like Cinderella Smiling and looking fine We should have known much better But we failed too see the signs You were playing to the crowds Laughing all the time. You forever were always joking But we failed too see the signs Everything seemed normal We were busy with our lives You always seemed quite happy But we failed too see the signs You suddenly took up drinking Drinking too much wine We really should have noticed But we failed too see the signs Now your no longer with us You had things going through your mind It may have been much differernt If we only saw those signs.
Tags: Depressing, Pain, Anger, Rhyme, Sad,
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Taha Hassan commented on Oct 24, 2017 at 11:37am
7th stanza: "was" should be changed to "were", doesn't affect the metre that much as well.
14th stanza: "to" should be changed to "too"
17th stanza: "your" should be changed to "you're"
19th stanza: spellcheck "Differant" into "Different"
Apologies for the criticism. your poem is otherwise great ^^. Thank you.
Frank Hornby .
commented on Oct 24, 2017 at 11:39am
Like they say,.....hindsight is a precious thing...it is so hard to always see the signs.....very good poem Chris....as usual..
Christopher Russon
commented on Oct 24, 2017 at 3:04pm
Thank you very much for your advice much welcomed Taha.
Christopher Russon
commented on Oct 24, 2017 at 3:06pm
Thank you Frank .some times those signs are hard to detect.
Cecilia Crasto
commented on Oct 24, 2017 at 10:28pm
It is often the ones who are closest who fail to see the signs, because they accept as norm what they do see, but there are always underlying signs that we miss and later regret~well done Christopher.
Christopher Russon
commented on Oct 25, 2017 at 11:25am
So true Cecilia.we do fail to see the signs.minds are hard to understand.thank you for your comment.
Nemo Nemees
commented on Dec 22, 2017 at 1:30am
damn.....im sorry...i know this is probably really cliche but i think some people can feel each others writings...and man i felt this....i didnt even have to know the situation, i just felt this
Christopher Russon
commented on Dec 22, 2017 at 8:10pm
Thank you Nemees.this is a sad fact many people Suffer depression. in my life I have
Known 4 who have made this decision And 2 attempted.it come under mentle health.
The mind can be very complicated.if we see people who are on highs and lows
My family member was like that.we just failed to see the signs.
