k river
commented on Jul 24, 2020 at 3:05am
The idea and subject of the poem are well chosen. But the lines could be paired down to improve the flow of the poem. Something I did that I found helped me tremendously was I took two free poetry writing classes on the free site allpoetry.com. It is a lot of work but I learned a great deal and it was a fun challenging process. My poetry expressive writing improved 1000% I also learned to write lots of different types of poetry and the importance of syllable count and word count. This is only a suggestion and is meant to help you improve your writing abilities. You will find as I did that the things you learn in those classes will in the long run make writing easier, more fun, the words will flow better and your writing will be more productive in a good way.
k river
commented on Jul 24, 2020 at 3:05am
The idea and subject of the poem are well chosen. But the lines could be paired down to improve the flow of the poem. Something I did that I found helped me tremendously was I took two free poetry writing classes on the free site allpoetry.com. It is a lot of work but I learned a great deal and it was a fun challenging process. My poetry expressive writing improved 1000% I also learned to write lots of different types of poetry and the importance of syllable count and word count. This is only a suggestion and is meant to help you improve your writing abilities. You will find as I did that the things you learn in those classes will in the long run make writing easier, more fun, the words will flow better and your writing will be more productive in a good way.