Emotional GPS
Spirit or soul, or just a black hole, Tell me why are we even here? Rhyme or rhythm, and beat by beat, Get out now if you can't take the heat. Up and down, or left to right, Walking by faith, or using your sight. Shaking your head, or acting as if dead, Does your emotional pulse rule your head? Table of contents, or the pages as written, Can you walk away, or have you been smitten? Walk or run, and just for fun, navigate your future, Joke or pun, clouds or sun, surgery or just a suture. Meal for two, or just a snack, taken or yet single, Poetic justice, or just a hack, recluse or like to mingle? Fly by night, is still alright, but security can be even better, Skin of your teeth, can really bite, next time take it to the letter. Let her go, or hold on tight, whatever choice you do decide, Stay apart, or reunite, just let your conscience be your guide. Time to move on, and set a new course, if only for a while, Get my groove on, why not? of course, and try not to be too vile. Sticks and stones, will what? c'mon now, you surely do know the rest, No broken bones, no names applied, I'm certain to pass this test.
Tags: rhyme, inspirational, hope,
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Ann Sdono commented:
I like it, well written.
ephraim crud
commented:
a nice train of thought, though the rhyme scheme's a tad wayward and makes the flow disjointed. whether we write in rhyme or free verse, the most essential tool is rhythm, and your piece would be much enhanced with some tinkering to that end. also, 'the fewer the words the more will out' i.e. some pruning would further enhance. good write nonetheless!
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Thanks Ephraim. Agreed. Most of my writings are the result of less than 30 minutes of initial thoughts on sleepless nights. Always room for improvement, so thanks for the constructive feedback.
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Thanks Ann. Appreciate your feedback
Christopher Russon
commented:
Well written poem with depth.
Myself am trying to break away from rhyme a little.
My problem I am not a massive reader.
On the other hand I listen to music alot hence the rhyming.
I thing I need to tread a lot more.
Christopher Russon
commented:
I mean read alot more.word came out wrong.
Edward shields
commented:
Don't rush your poetry.
