The signs.

poem by: Christopher Russon
Written on Oct 23, 2017

You danced like Cinderella
Smiling and looking fine
We should have known much better
But we failed too see the signs
You were playing to the crowd
Laughing all the time.
You forever were always joking
But we failed too see the signs
Everything seemed normal
We were busy with our lives
You always seemed quite happy
But we failed too see the signs
You suddenly took up drinking
Drinking too much wine
We really should have noticed
But we failed too see the signs
Now your no longer with us
You had things going through your mind
It may have been much differernt
If we only saw those signs.

 

Tags: Pain, Depressing, Anger, Rhyme, Sad,

Add Comment


Taha Hassan commented on Oct 24, 2017 at 11:37am
7th stanza: "was" should be changed to "were", doesn't affect the metre that much as well. 14th stanza: "to" should be changed to "too" 17th stanza: "your" should be changed to "you're" 19th stanza: spellcheck "Differant" into "Different" Apologies for the criticism. your poem is otherwise great ^^. Thank you.
Frank byrne commented on Oct 24, 2017 at 11:39am
Like they say,.....hindsight is a precious thing...it is so hard to always see the signs.....very good poem Chris....as usual..
Christopher Russon commented on Oct 24, 2017 at 3:04pm
Thank you very much for your advice much welcomed Taha.
Christopher Russon commented on Oct 24, 2017 at 3:06pm
Thank you Frank .some times those signs are hard to detect.
Cecilia Crasto commented on Oct 24, 2017 at 10:28pm
It is often the ones who are closest who fail to see the signs, because they accept as norm what they do see, but there are always underlying signs that we miss and later regret~well done Christopher.
Christopher Russon commented on Oct 25, 2017 at 11:25am
So true Cecilia.we do fail to see the signs.minds are hard to understand.thank you for your comment.

 

More by Christopher Russon

...
A poem for my father.

poem by Christopher Russon

He was there To put me right When I was going w... Read more

...
Two-fold

poem by Christopher Russon

A simple poem is like a caterpillar That is on ... Read more