commented on Oct 06, 2017 at 4:00am
I love this! Especially
I don't have the answers to questions unasked
My being craves them
The ending is awesome, and when I say the ending I mean the whole third stanza and the very last line. I love the way It builds up. The start is interesting (I mean the very first stanza, the first two lines) and I like it. I would say the first line is too long but it actually gives quite a nice effect. I think I know what you mean in those first two lines. I think I know what you mean through this poem. And I like it. It speaks to me. 'Controlled by the unknown before it strikes and the toll rises.' I don't have anything negative to say!! You're a really good writer. If you want some constructive criticism, call up a poet better than I am, lol.
commented on Oct 11, 2017 at 9:49pm